The JRP was the biggest and most difficult piece of writing I have done in my time in high school. it wasn't a super fun experience for me, the topic I was writing about was interesting which made it slightly easier to write about. During the process of writing this I struggled with having things to talk about in the essay. It was also difficult to find new ways to same the same things. I still struggle with having enough to talk about in the essay. I improved upon my citation and work-cited section in this essay over my previous essays. I think the most interesting this that I found was all of the information on this topic and how deep the reality of structural racism actually permeates our modern day society.
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I haven't gotten very far due to a resent set back where all of the power went out in my house so I couldn't make any progress. I have completed my history section and am now starting on my arguments. By Monday the 24th I need to have all three of my arguments done along with the counter and refutation. By the day this project is due next week I nee to have added an intro, current issue, and conclusion to my draft. This weekend is going to be a major work time for me because I don't have much time after school on Monday and Tuesday due to Lacrosse practice and game. So this weekend I need to cram this weekend in order to make the deadline.
After getting this essay back I can tell I improved on many things from my last essay but still have to work on a few things moving into the JRP. To start off with, I did good with my argument, Writing, CLEAR paragraph structure, evidence, and annotations. I felt strong in most of the things I just mentioned while writing the essay. however there are some things I need to work on, these are my complex thesis and templates. I will keep this in mind leading into the JRP.
After finishing my essay I can tell what I did well, okay, and not so great on. I think I did really well with conjunctive adverbs, for example here's one from my essay that I think I did great on "Some may say that Obama is more persuasive; however, my view is that Trump’s speech is the more persuasive because he uses a lot of loaded words as opposed to glittering generalities to bring people together against common enemies." Something I didn't do as well on but I believe I did okay was introductions to quotes "Obama’s central insight is “ I stand here today grateful for the diversity of my heritage, aware that my parents' dreams live on in my two precious daughters.”"
and lastly something I didn't do well on was my hook, I don't think it flowed well with the rest of the essay "President, Donald Trump, is one of only five presidents to have never been elected to public office before becoming President."
This year I'm just preforming for another year I don't believe I've learned much at all. This is partially because we have had so many evaluations like tests and quizzes, When I'm focused on keeping my grade up I'm not focused on actually taking in the information. Maybe I could not worry about my grades as much to pay more attention to the information but then my grades would drop and even if I learned it no one would care because all anyone sees is your grade. So in reality it doesn't matter if you learn the material as long as you are able to preform well enough to make it look like you did so that collages will accept you.
Yes I do believe that education is important but I also believe it can be done in different ways and it doesn't have to be a ridged as the current school system has made it. I've learned in many different ways personally in my life. For example I have learned a lot about cars and motorcycle and how they work by doing research on my own time, without a teacher or classroom. Many people can also learn through doing instead of being told what to do.
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AuthorYo my name's Joell and I'm doing this for my english class because I have to. Archives
April 2019
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